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The Never Ending Scene Blogfest!

So, I saw this blogfest and decided that I would like to give it a go! It is a fab idea and well, because its Brenda Drake and C A Marshall that are involved.  I have been following them for long enough on twitter and their blogs to know that a critique from them would be amazing!

So, this is a book that I have had finished for a while and I am still in love with the story, that’s a good sign isn’t it?

Its an Urban Fantasy Romance and it is part of a three part series, I have number two almost finished.

I wont bore you with any more of my ramblings, I will just post my 500 words and leave it to you to read and hopefully want to read some more, so here we go…….

 Lilly turned towards the loud voice that chilled her veins and made her heart stop in an instant.

 She knew in a heart beat what – who – she was looking at. Her subconscious knew his name. Her subconscious cowered in fear as she watched the towering bulk of the half man half clawed- hairless beast standing majestically at the edge of the room.
It had shiny black leathery skin that was taut across his bony face and gripped his inhumanly large muscles, that seemed to ripple and flex all over his massive body.


 She had felt the tremor of his bass voice rock through her terrified soul, if she still had one? And her skin continued to ripple with fear.
 She locked her eyes on him and couldn’t -even if she tried- pull them away from his magnificently large body. She tracked her terrified but fixated gaze down his bare chest, taking in the sheer size of the beast. Her eyes stopped on the red swirly markings that were emblazoned across his muscular body, they sat like a neon tattoo against the stark black of his skin. She slid her eyes past his loin cloth and down his legs that had strange nail like hooks coming from his calf muscles, like an ancient horse.


 Her eyes snapped back up to his face and with a gulp of fear she found him to be looking at her with his soullessly creepy black eyes that shone out from his angular face. A ripple of disgust ran over her body making her want to squirm with the feeling, but she managed to hold it together.   Even under his hideously taunting gaze.


 He cocked his head to the side in a disturbingly animalistic move that made Lilly shudder all the way to her toes.
 ‘’You!’’ He bellowed and pointed to Lilly ‘’Do you speak for them?’’ Lilly turned a little to her right and saw the other girls standing in a line right by her side, all of them flicking their eyes frantically between her and the immense being.
 ‘’I do’’ Lilly announced before she even had time to think. Her head racing to catch up with something that Lilly felt she had no control of.
The will to protect these girls.

The will to be their leader.

 The beast looked at Lilly and then he turned to the glass wall in front of all the writhing people. He placed his hand on the glass and lovingly stroked a line down the gruesome display.
A woman behind the glass began to wail and scream at the sight of him. The beast let out a cruel laugh and she could see his shoulders ripple and tense under the muscle.


 Lilly had a strong urge to gag as she watched the writhing people, bump and slide around the small space behind the glass. Fire licking at their toes, burning and charring their already tender skin.


 ‘’Do you like my art, Wrath?’’ The beast’s deep voice boomed loudly against the thick glass. He turned around and swept his black, cold eyes over all four of them and then over to the man who had choked Lilly.
 ‘’Yes, very much’’ the Psycho answered with an over enthusiastic nod that made him look like a nodding dog.


 Lilly’s face crumpled as her emotions crept onto her expression and she quickly righted her scowl before either the man or beast saw her thoughts……..